(revised) A moment of poetic seriousness...


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Posted by Tom Hollywood on November 13, 98 at 23:52:31:

In Reply to: A moment of poetic seriousness... posted by Tom Hollywood on November 12, 98 at 14:29:03:

Here I go again... :)

I did the first one kinda too quick and didn't examine it enough. There were some repeated key words only two lines apart, so I wanted to break them up. Also wanted to add more emotional and personal elements, and end with a more definitive word...DIE!

The Innocent Victim

I went to the party, Mom
And remembered what you said
You told me not to drink
So I drank a Coke instead

I really felt proud inside, Mom
The way you said I would
I didn't drink a drop
When the others said I should

I know I did the right thing, Mom
I know you're always right
Now the party is finally ending
And people drive into the night

As I got into my car, Mom
I knew I'd get home fine
Because the way you raised me
So responsible and kind

I started to drive away, Mom
And as I pulled into the street
Another car didn't see me
And slammed me from my seat

As I lay here on the pavement, Mom,
I hear the policeman say
"The other guy is drunk!"
And I'm the one to pay

I'm lying here and dying, Mom
I wish you'd get here soon
I hope and pray it's all a dream
As I gaze up at the moon

There's a pool of blood around me, Mom
And most of it is mine
I hear the paramedics say
I'll be dead in a short time

I just wanted to tell you, Mom
I swear I didn't drink
It was the others, and not me
Who simply didn't think

Why do people drink, Mom
It can ruin an entire life
I'm feeling sharp pains now
And my vision's not quite right

The person who hit me's walking, Mom,
And I don't think that is fair
Since I'm the one drowning in blood
While that jerk takes in fresh air

Tell my brother not to cry, Mom
And ask Daddy to be brave
Please don't let my little sister
Sit and grieve before my grave

I'll miss my talks with grandpa
And those loving hugs from gram
But what really hurts the most
Is that I won't see you again

Why didn't someone say, Mom
"Hey, you shouldn't drink and drive?"
If only they had said those words
I know I'd be alive

My breath is getting shorter, Mom
And I'm getting very cold
Guess I'll never get the chance
To see myself get gray and old

I have a final question, Mom
Before I say "good-bye"...
If I didn't drink and drive tonight
Why am I the one to die?


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